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The Lightning Leaps from the Sky

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    The wind blows high and the sky hangs low,

    Tall ships are swallowed as the billows roll,

    The storm rears back with a bended bow,

    The lightning leaps from the sky.

     

    Thunder roars o’er sea and coast,

    Bright light flickers like a fleeting ghost,

    Aye, ‘tis when we can see the most,

    The lightning leaps from the sky.

     

    The light’s gone out on the beacon tall,

    The keel cuts jagged ‘neath a leaking hull,

    The masts all groan in the wailing squall,

    The lightning leaps from the sky.

     

    The rocks like dirks stabbing sea and sky,

    Like hungry teeth in the stormy tide,

    ‘Tis doomed ships’ hulls that they love to bite,

    The lightning leaps from the sky.

     

    The brine foams bitter on the sea waves cold

    That break with violence on the sea cliffs old,

    Many a soul would the sea enfold,

    The lightning leaps from the sky.

     

    Doleful wraiths drift beneath the waves

    Bemoaning death o’er watery graves,

    How the heart for deliverance craves,

    The lightning leaps from the sky.

     

    The raindrops’ lash cutting to the bone,

    Ice-flesh burning from the salty foam,

    Course is lost and a-lost is home,

    The Lightning leaps from the sky.

So I needed a song for a scene in a story... It wasn't originally going to have as much of a sea-shanty-ish feel, but it changed as the scene progressed.  It's a very sad scene.  I really wish I could post the story, but I'm hoping to get it published, so I'm not posting it anywhere just yet to avoid any possible issues.

I was actually reading Courier2001's story 'Stranger's Twilight' when the line "The wind blows high and the sky hangs low," popped into my head, inspired by what I was reading :la:.  I recommend giving his story a read! fav.me/d75jp7b :D  In fact, it popped into my head already put to music, and the rest largely just sort of flowed (with a little bit of coaxing)
Anywho... Well, I have a tune I sing it to like I said, and it's very simple, but I can't write music (I can barely read it).  A friend of mine is going to help me write the melodies for all the little ditties I've been jotting up lately though (he's very good at writing and reading music).  If enough people are interested, I could post those.

By the way, rhymezone.com/ is an excellent resource for writing.  It divides its results up by number of syllables and will return almost-rhymes, synonyms, antonyms, homophones, definitions, similar sounding words, related words, and even match specific letters, and more.  I've been using it a lot lately. :)

Well... I have another little story to post and then I really should get off for the day and get some stuff done (:()

As always, I appreciate any feedback or suggestions :)


Lyrics/poem/etc. (C) Cody Hilson.
Please do not use without permission.
© 2014 - 2024 Feanor-the-Dragon
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:jawdrop: :clap:

Your work is well written! That's pretty much what I can say. The rhyme scheme was very well handled, the refrain (for me) did not feel forced, and its meter was brilliant. Truly brilliant.

I personally had two things in my head when I finished reading this work:

1) your other poems:

Fie! Fie!Fie!  Fie!
Forsooth, wist I,
Much seemeth out of sorts.
Pale moonlight falls,
‘Pon darksome walls;
Fey shadow o’er the courts.
 
Fey and fie,
For evil’s nigh;
Doth spirit darkly stain.
Sleep doth refuse to dulcetize,
The greater then the strain.
 
Fly!  Fly!
Heed ye my cry!
For watch ye not the doors?
Dim twilight lay,
On landscape fey.
Mist sprawleth ‘cross the moors.
 
Fie and Hark!
Doth eye not mark,
The brimstone-flash of hell?
The Gurlock creeps,       
Down from the steeps;
I know his reek right well.
 
Fie!  Fie!
Too late to hide!
Up now, and bar the door!
The creature crawls,
O’er stony walls,
Yet ye lay on the floor?
 
Hearken! Hear!
For death lurks near!
The creature’s drool drips warm.
Unto that beast,
Strength is a feast;
Weak is the strong man’s arm.
 
Ye lazy dafts!
I’ve with thy hafts,
Barred entrance to these halls;
This Grendel they,
Shan
 and  Kale's LamentationTears for me have long run dry;
All joy to me now seems a lie,
As does hope for bright tomorrow;
 
I can find no rest in sleep;
I’ve no more the heart to weep,
Yet more deeply burns my sorrow;
 
Wearied of counting the cost,
And of what’s lost being lost,
Of fate spun out of my control,
 
I’m tired of giving my tears,
To my sorrows, griefs, and fears,
As ransom for my heart and soul;
 
What’s lost was cruelly taken;
Are we truly so shaken,
To do aught but mourn its passing?
 
Shall un-avenged be the wrongs?
Wrongdoers sing mirth-ful songs,
Though our sorrows keep amassing?
 
I and you, we are mourning;
For death stained hope a-borning;
Sad night fell at the dawn of day;
 
Why do we tearfully sit,
All unwilling to admit,
That tears can’t wash the blood away?
 



and 2) Skyrim, the 30 minute loop of Kito Otani's "A Despair Filled Farewell" and Adrian Von Ziegler's "Wolves of the Sea".

Well done :) Truly...